I have two. The Ritual and Drowning.
The Ritual is pure smut. 61 chapters and every one contains a graphic, demeaning sex scene. I’m convinced the author was an adult film screenwriter and decided to try their hand at writing a novel. There isn’t a single likable character in this book.
Drowning isn’t a great work of literature. I felt that the characters were very two-dimensional. I hated how naive the author made the protagonist. It made me have a lack of sympathy for her. The ending was series finale of Dexter bad.
Gotta disagree with this one, I loved this book. Was the writing perfect? Well, as we can see from your example, definitely not, but I thought the story was beautiful and the characters were interesting enough to keep me going until the end. Totally get why it wasn’t your cup of tea.