I had to take a break from an otherwise great fanfic when I noticed I’d started counting the number of quirking mouths (and/or eyebrows) in each chapter. I still feel a little tic (a quirk of an eyebrow, if you will) coming on when I see the expression. I would have said this is the kind of thing an editor saves you from, but having seen all the other examples in the thread, maybe not…
I’m sort of crawling through The Stand at the moment, and (TW) there’s a boy he absolutely cannot let enter the page without commenting on his “savage”/“slanted”/“Chinese” (sometimes one or two of these, sometimes all three) eyes, which makes me really uncomfortable. Same with all the descriptions of how fat one character is and how disgusting we’re obviously meant to find him because of that. As for repetition, well, I unfortunately got the version of the book that includes a bunch of stuff originally cut, which makes it clock in at some 1300 pages, which I find hard to believe is necessary.