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Cake day: November 9th, 2023

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  • Zuzublue@alien.top
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    BtoBooksWould you read this?
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    1 year ago

    I think the last part that starts “as they days tuned to weeks…” is ok but the rest is sort of stream of consciousness with too many ideas going on. They need a short hook to get people invested and a very brief understanding of what’s to come.